Essay Question: Some people say that because of economic progress, the government is ignoring other types of progress for a country. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Introduction
• Clarity: Yes, the topic is introduced clearly and directly.
• Thesis: The writer takes a clear stance (partial agreement), emphasizing the need to balance economic and other forms of progress.
? Body Paragraphs
Main Ideas (Pros/Cons):
Paragraph 1:
• Economic growth ? job creation
• Higher tax revenue ? public service investment
• Boosts international status
Paragraph 2:
• Importance of social justice and human rights
• Environmental protection and sustainability
• Broader definition of national success (health, equality, well-being)
Coherence:
• Balanced coverage of both perspectives
• Logical organization and smooth transitions between paragraphs
? Conclusion
Summary:
• Clearly restates the main argument: economic growth is important but must be pursued alongside social and environmental development.
? Vocabulary & Grammar
High-Level Vocabulary:
• Robust – strong and effective
• Flourishing – thriving, doing well
• Safeguarding – protecting something important
• Renewable energy – sustainable energy sources like solar or wind
• Holistic – considering the whole picture, not just parts
Academic Phrases:
• “There are many other factors that governments must address…”
• “A well-rounded approach that encompasses…”
Complex Sentences:
• “This means economic growth provides governments with the financial resources necessary to invest in public infrastructure and services…”
• “Governments ought to invest in renewable energy sources… while also working to reduce their impact on climate change.”